Having read some of Ians work before, I was straight away caught off-guard by just how much of a departure it was from his normal style. And this is in no-way a bad thing. There's a lot that works in this pilot, and only a few things that don't. So, the positives first.
For starters, characters. Everyone is established very well, from Clara's cold and unforgiving persona, which you just know is a facade for much deeper issues, to Jane, who's already emerging as a very charming individual, who I think potential readers will be very much drawn to. Owen and Thomas don't stick out as much, but there's enough there to lay the groundwork for future stories. I think one of the biggest strengths of the pilot lay in the dialogue. It flows very nicely from character to character, and there's no awkward beats, or clunky sentences. Top marks on that note.
Plot-wise, the first half of the episode moves very nicely, culminatin in the train scene, which is a very nice way of bringing the core characters togeth in a way that's not contrived. It gives us our first glimpse of all the characters together, something which will surely become a focal point to the series.
However, it's here that things start to fall down a little bit. While I appreciate the symmetery of the opening scene, and Clara first waking up in this new dimension, it does feel a little cliched. On top of this come's about 15 pages of pretty much dialogue. While allowing for an interesting character study, it does get a tad boring, with nothing much to punctuate the heavy use of of exposition. That said, things do begin to pick-up again, with the police-station break in, demonstrating these characters working as a team. Ian should be congratulated here on how well the gang gel together - a fea that's not easy to achieve, especially in VS. Things to start to get really exciting here, and he twist at the end, involving Thomas with Liam comes totally out of left field, allowing the pilot to bow out on a high note.
All in all, a very well-put together pitch and pilot, offering good insight into what could very well be a new classic for MZP, certainly well deserving of a spot on the new schedule. "Other Side of the World" gains points on character (good development), setting (very well described) and writing (with no incorrect SPAG in site). Loses some on a few missteps with plot and pacing, but really, not much to complain about. Well done, Ian.
FINAL SCORING
8.5/10
8.5/10